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I Remember Last Spring by ~Sister-Sleep:iconSister-Sleep:



I remember last spring
with it's gold-dipped wings
and your bodies' hot white
stone.

I am waiting at a platform remembering
last spring, with it's gold-dipped wings
and watching the rails between the coals
gleam like Godpoints between
their screwed coals -
your bodies' strong white stone.

And a man is looking at his phone
holding cream-coloured dogs who strain on
mismatched leashes and  rub themselves on the sunbrewed
concrete.

I am waiting at a platform remembering
last spring, with it's gold-dipped wings
and your bodies' young white stone

and the women cross their

legs -
©2008 ~Sister-Sleep
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Coming up to year and the weather is the same as it was when we first started going out, so I was thinking about that.

Also wondering if my poetry is as 'elliptical' as everyone says it is. By everyone I mean my english teacher and all. I hate the word 'elliptical'. Not so much the meaning but just the sound of it. I hate the word 'sepia' to. Sepia sounds like a horrible blonde girl.

Elliptical reminds me of the top of a wind glass.

I guess this poem is easter-riffic!

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~mediocrepoet:iconmediocrepoet: Mar 10, 2008, 9:33:52 AM
Sepia sounds like an STI, to be honest.

I like this piece.

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"Frankly, I have no taste for either poverty or honest labor, so writing is the only recourse left for me." - Hunter S. Thompson
~dragonsdollz:icondragonsdollz: Mar 10, 2008, 1:45:18 PM
I like it. :) I really do. You are amazing writer. :)

xxx

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Razorblade Kisses; A Beautiful Nightmare..
*kLiT-sHy:iconkLiT-sHy: Apr 7, 2008, 3:40:40 AM
:heart:

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there is beauty in evasion and at times, it's too beautiful that it becomes faceless