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Crabs In A Polystyrene Crate by ~Sister-Sleep:iconSister-Sleep:



Spiking rocks green-fed,
flaking ice-bed so far from
your tepid mouth of rock-pool
with it's tender fringe of algea.

Dead crab in a polystyrene crate,
your eyes are still so impossibly small,
but does your sidecoded disc-brain, ridged,
remember minnow-crushing sundays,
your sisters' hands like stinging orchids
as they were lifted in the swash, their brutish scarlet bonegowns billowing -

Discos on a dead sailor's femur, until it would snap at dusk
from your humpbacked quicksteps.

Dead crab in a polystyrene crate,
for sale on a market stall -
do the eels beside you sometimes writhe questions
through their rubber death film?

Ask you why you didn't try harder
to snap the ropes
un-net the nets?
©2008 ~Sister-Sleep
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Crab, I want your body. IN MY SANDWIDGES.

seafood theme been in my poems recently. Yeah, I don't get that either. Inspired by Deptford High Street. You have never seen so many fish/betting/pound/afro-beauty shops in your life, trust.

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~chugglepuff:iconchugglepuff: Mar 15, 2008, 2:27:42 PM
Wow, I absolutely love this. Such fantastic imagery. I'm blown away.

The only suggestions I would make are possibly to change "your tepid mouth of rock-pool" to "your tepid rock-pool mouth". I know you've got 2 adjectives next to each other, then, but it just sounds better to me. :shrug: Just a thought. The other thing is that I think it should be "algae" instead of "algea". :)

It really is unbelievable that you can make this out of a dead crab.

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~dragonsdollz:icondragonsdollz: Mar 16, 2008, 3:49:38 PM
I really love it! :D Wonderful. :)

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